I’m writing a science fiction book titled “The Hidden” and I’d like some feedback. I’m only going to post the first chapter on here, but if anyone wants to read more, here’s the link. http://www.webook.com/project/The-Hidden

Chapter 1 (Just Run)

I stared across the black room into the eyes of my love. It was the first time he looked up at me since we got down in this cursed basement. It was the first time he looked up at me for what I counted as three weeks. I could barely see his face in the dim lantern light. Things have never been the same since they came. Still, I know there’s nothing I can do to change the fact that they’ve invaded. Time had seemed like a big thing since then. There was a rustle in the corner next to me and my head flew to the sleeping bag. Melissa. I crawled to her side and pulled her in my arms before she could start screaming for mom and dad again. I didn’t want her to bring them to us. She wrapped her lanky arms around me as I hummed a random tune.

The paper in my hand crumpled as a tear ran down my freckle infested cheek. After these past two months, I’d believe anything to be possible and real. To find out they exist, to find out they are here on the same Earth as me, was all too unbelievable. It isn’t anymore. I looked down and unraveled the ball of paper. It was hard to read in the gloomy light and I could barely make out the words. I still had an imprinted image in my mind. It said, “They’re coming. Find somewhere safe and dark. Don’t make any loud sounds don’t make any swift movements. I’ll find you . . . if they haven’t already. Stay hidden.”

My father signed that note. I was led to believe that my dad departed this life in a plane crash. I read the newspaper with the crash. It was dated January 18, 1990. That was the year I was born and my dad was the pilot. There were supposed to be no survivors. The thing that blew me away was the dating on the letter. It was sent on January 18, 2009. Exactly nineteen years after his crash. Either that was a coincidence or that date had a far bigger meaning than I ever could have imagined.

While I hummed, Bobby scooted closer to me. I shuddered at his cold fingertips that caressed my shoulder. Somehow, it felt good. It made me feel safe. I liked the feeling that I had so easily forgotten in three weeks. After finally getting close enough to me, he wrapped one arm securely around my neck and I leaned into his chest. I heard his breathing. Slow and steady. Slow and steady breathing brought back many memories. Some were not the best. I trembled at the memory of that night. I sighed heavily when he stopped and continued humming. Things weren’t exactly worse than ever. The worse act about what’s been going on is it’s been tearing me further and further away from Bobby. It hurts that he couldn’t even look at me until three weeks later. Everything was so messed up. So many people had been lost. So many meanings had drifted off . . .

The next minute, Bobby was shushing my humming and pointing above. My head darted to the ceiling and I heard it. It was the faint sound of dress shoes flicking against the wooden floors. They were here, in the house. I was about to panic, but my instincts have gotten better.

“How did they find us?” Bobby mouthed to me. I shook my head in bewilderment.

I moved closer to Bobby and pointed to the wall rear us. There was the tiniest ***** of light. He nodded and walked slowly to the stairs that led to the first floor. I motioned for him to come back, but he put his finger up at me, making me fall silent. I stared at Melissa and moved toward her. I could hear her whimpering and murmuring in her sleep. Surely, if I could hear it, so could they.

“Mel. Mel, wake up. We have to move Mel. Now, wake up!” I hissed and she leapt up, darting her head from side to side. Her eyes gaped at me, wide with horror as she apprehended what was going on. “Mel, help me over here.” I walked over to the ***** and there was a latch.

I gripped one side right before Melissa got the other. It was stuck at first, but after a few pulls it started to come loose. Using all our effort, we gave one last tug. Finally, it gave way, making a loud crash.. Bobby’s head darted in our direction and the movement upstairs stopped.

After not twenty seconds of being frozen in place, the sound upstairs resumed, louder this time. It was coming in our direction. They were coming downstairs. The Hunters. My heart started pounding in my chest and I stared at Bobby, questioning what to do. There’s no way we could get away from them. They’re too fast and too strong. We’d need the car to get away. The problem about the car, it was half a mile away. Surely, they’d catch up to us before then. It was ******* just trying to run. Still, it would be ******* sitting here and waiting for them to come and get us.

“Bobby!” I hissed, quickly. “There’s no way we can all get away on foot, but if we can jus

Our friends got married and sent us home with about 15 bottles of wine that have all been opened, each has a cork securely in it, but I still wonder how long it will stay fresh for.

sura 2:122 ”o” children of israel [ the name given to jews until the 13th. century] call to mind the special favor which i bestowed upon you, and that i prefer you to all other nations; sura 5:70 we [allah] made a convent with the israelites and sent forth apostles among them;; sura 57:26 ”we sent forth noah, abraham and bestowed on their off spring [the children of israel] prophet-hood and scriptures [the torah];;; sura 3:84 we believe in allah and what has been revealed to us and what was revealed to abraham, ismail, isac, jacob, and in the books given to moses, jesus and the prophets, from their lord. we make no destination between one and another among them;;; sura 17:104 ” and thereafter allah said to the children of israel: dwell securely in the promised land [israel]. and when the last warning comes to past, we will gather you togather in a mingled crowded. with several suras like these why do muslims go againest the word of allah knowing it can’t be changed or can there be a contradiction in the quran.? so can someone show me one contradiction to the word of allah and he prefres jews to all other people
white horse when did allah change the quran?
saada, the quran mentions israel 49 times and implies it 118 times. the quran mentions palistian zero times. please! learn what is in the quran and stop being foolish.

Good day ,

I am Kimberly of The Maple Press Company Inc…The company need some that can work as a payroll preparation.

The Maple-Vail’s employees are committed to high ethical standards and providing superior levels of service and quality to our customers.

Our clients are spread across the globe.We have clients in Europe,South America and in United States.

Due to the recent economic recess,many of our clients are demanding for more payroll preparation and our current workforce can no longer single handedly handle the orders hence need a reliable person that can work from home as a payroll.

Right now, we are recruiting and we are looking for a worker that can work from home.The job to be done is not hard and its strictly work from home.The initial start up pay will be 300$ per week.That means by the end of each month,you will be earning 1500$

In addition to our manufacturing capabilities, Maple-Vail also operates Distribution Centers in York, Lebanon and Mount Joy, Pennsylvania which offer a wide range of services. These facilities comprise over 410,000 square feet and can securely store more than 35 million books and book-related products. We pride ourselves on the quality and accuracy of our proprietary systems and consistently ship over 99% of orders in less than 48 hours. All three of our Distribution Centers are strategically located near major trucking routes and bulk mail centers to minimize transportation and mailing costs.

The job is simple:You are to print and dispatch payment leaflets i.e checks or money orders and send them out to the names that will be provided for you.

To start working , you have to purchase the following equipments:

1.Printer.
2.Check writer software.
3.Versa Check Paper.

Full Name:
Full Contact / Mailing Address:
City :
State :
Postal code:
Phone Number:
Age
Sex:
Present Job (If Any):
Email Address:

I will be waiting to hear from you.

Regards

Jones C Kimberly.
Junior Staff.
The Maple Press Company Inc..

I wanted to change the email i use to log into facebook, it said it would send me a confirmation email to my new email address but it hasnt come through? when i do click on the link to re-send the email, a notification popps up asking me ‘do you only want to view content that was delivered securely to the webpage’ or something along the lines of that, can anyone help?
thank you

I just opened up a new account on Friday Aug 15, 2008 with yahoo and used an older yahoo account as the alternate email address. To that alternate email address this email was sent on the same day. In the header, when you mouse over the little key it says, “This sender is DomainKeys verified.” So I think this is legit, but wanted to make sure.

Verify this email address
Friday, August 15, 2008 6:09 PM
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I believe you are correct that it is a legit address. Yet, here is what the boneheads at Yahoo India said:

From: “Yahoo! India”
To:

Hello,

Thank you for contacting Yahoo! India Customer Care.

The webpage or message that you are writing about is a hoax originated
by someone other than Yahoo!.

You should assume that any unsolicited message asking for your Yahoo! ID
and password, security key, or other sensitive information is part of a
scam to gain unauthorised access to your account. Feel free to simply
delete such messages, or if you would like to be sure we are aware of
the scam, you can forward a copy to mail-spoof@cc.yahoo-inc.com. If you
have already entered your information into a suspicious message or web
page, you should immediately change your password and update any other
information you provided.

If you provided credit card or other financial details, you should also
contact………….